I really enjoyed reading Olivia's blog I thought her sonnet was really great and all her poems offered some funny rhymes and refreshing metaphors. I loved her responses to poems and pictures and how much detail she put into them.I think her blog shows a lot of effort and her homework reflects that.she definitely thought more about what she was writing and not that it was just homework.
I also really enjoyed austere blog she gets really into all of her entries and a lot of her poems were written as if she experienced every moment she wrote about. Man of her responses were choppy and not as detailed as Olivia's but they had really good ideas. They could have been expressed a lot better though.
I also really like julias blog she hit every point in both entries poems and responses. I think she cares about the homework she does and uses the terms used in class to explain her thought process.
Wednesday, February 16, 2011
Monday, February 14, 2011
sonnet 1
Red roses always seek perfect shaped hearts
But all hearts have many inperfetions
They are banged and bruised not black nor blue
They stand a glowing red, painted just right
Ready to be broken from heartless life
They chose dremers from devils instead
And cupid sings lullabys to mend their love
To make devils dream and make dreamers sing
To speak as if the day will grow undamaged
To pray to whom it may concern that if
The dreamers can sing devils can too learn
And if devils can learn, people rome free
To make earth better for you and for me
Your heart beats fast and so does mine time slows
But all hearts have many inperfetions
They are banged and bruised not black nor blue
They stand a glowing red, painted just right
Ready to be broken from heartless life
They chose dremers from devils instead
And cupid sings lullabys to mend their love
To make devils dream and make dreamers sing
To speak as if the day will grow undamaged
To pray to whom it may concern that if
The dreamers can sing devils can too learn
And if devils can learn, people rome free
To make earth better for you and for me
Your heart beats fast and so does mine time slows
Tuesday, February 8, 2011
SONNET
The subway maps are all wrong
With an arrow of direction and a sparrow of connection
connection to all that now rome free
free of robins and blue jays and grand supremes
A myriad of numbers that flash through my brain
No meanings no rememberance not even of change
They sing through the trees and echo through the park
catching up to my legs that run faster as i notice the dark
The birds still sing and the wind still whistles
They work as one down to every swift tickle
They dance to the tunes the birds sing
And sway to the whistles the wind begs to stay
They dance and sing and oh how they laugh
but when dawn arrives they are gone with a gasp
With an arrow of direction and a sparrow of connection
connection to all that now rome free
free of robins and blue jays and grand supremes
A myriad of numbers that flash through my brain
No meanings no rememberance not even of change
They sing through the trees and echo through the park
catching up to my legs that run faster as i notice the dark
The birds still sing and the wind still whistles
They work as one down to every swift tickle
They dance to the tunes the birds sing
And sway to the whistles the wind begs to stay
They dance and sing and oh how they laugh
but when dawn arrives they are gone with a gasp
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